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Oren Itanooren12/10/08 18:25View
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OrpheusDarkfoldThe Rain Fell relentlessly, the wetness, and the combnation of the hot santa ana winds were a new sensation to Orpheus. Sitting on the roof of the old Hollywood and Highland Center, it's once fresh and new face dirtied with age, and conflict. tHe great elephants holding up the statues looked like demons in the afternoon storm. Shaking the rain from his hood, orpheus pull out a black and mild, and looked at it in wonder, wondering how such things even survived to this age. " oh fucking well" Orpheus muttered out loud, reaching for the old dollar store lighter he had in his pocket, and after a dozen stikes, lit the black. Inhaling deeply, Orpheus was shocked at the freshness, after all it has been a long time since thic company has even been in existence." where the hell did you get this Perse?" standing behind Orpheus sheileded from the ceaseless rain by a grey hood cloak was Persephone Walamai. Oprheus looka at her, while she reoved her hood, shaking her head slightly long black hair spilling out. a slight grin crossed her face as she mad a swift gesture with her slender hand, , and the cigare flew fro Orpheus' hand, into her fingers. He frowned at her as she took a long drag from it,exhaled, and gave it back as she approached. " i have my ways Orpheus" She said, her eyes glowing a faint orange, looking out over the ruined courtyard. Persephone turned and looked at orpheus, while he gaze over the ruins, a hint of sadness in his eyes while he smoked." I know this is going to be hard for you, so much changed in a seemingly short time" " it's all just a nightmare to me perse", Orpheus said looking at his mechanical hand. in his first few days he was assaulted, shot up for unknown reasons, a Madman intervened, but not before he lost his arm,, and his eye due to the injuries. Had it not Been For Persephone, and The Eternal Order, he would have died in the gutters of Lost Angels. After all it had been the strange woman who had found him , hooked up to a Cryo machine in The mountains. How he ended up there is almost as unreal to him as this new world he found himself in. Born at Martin Luther King Hospital, in South Central Los Angeles in the 70's, Orpheus was a life long resident of the city. being the child of an immigrant greek family, Orpheus grew up with the basics, but was never a rich kid. He spend his first 13 years on earth in the mean streets of South Central, and learned some hard and early lessons. For his saftey, his parents moved to Hollywood, where he continued to get into trouble, hollywood going through it's dark times then. Then there was the move to Venice Beach, Orpheus remebered that well, it was the first time he had seen the ocean, and it mesmerized him. Immersing himself in the local culture it didnt take long for him to become a masterful surfer, and an excellent blunt roller. Orpheus smiled at this memory, the many times spent on the boardwalk with his friends smoking, and dreaming about the future. By time he was 18 Orpheus had an interest in the military, and decided that his goal was to use the United States Army as a way to go to college, he never figured it would turn into a carreer. In a few short years, he was an army ranger, and was exposed to the darkness that plagued our world even then, war, death, and destruction. He quickly made Delta fore, and stood amongst the elite of all military forces, being deployed all around the world, doing the dirty work of the US goverment. After 12 years of seing brutality and death on a ridiculous scale, Orpheus decided it was time to go home, to SoCal and there he quickly joined the infamous LAPD. After a few years as a beat cop in the Rampart division, Orpheus graduated to Detectve status, and was working homicides from The Valley to South Central. He was one of the few cops who really gave a damn about the people of the city, and took advantage of old relationships in South central to ease tensions. After the Rampart Scandal broke, Orpheus led the investigation against the rogue cops, and Internal Affairs, thus stopping his rise through the force. It was then he saw the corruption of the powers that be, and before they could force him out, he took an offer from the US marshall department. Once again he was taken from the city, to pursue criminals around the country, and at times the world. Many of these assignments crossed paths with the CIA, and NSA, and through these paths, he became one of them. His missions for the CIA and NSA kept him home in Los angeles, his assigned area, and he made a legion of enemies amongst the criminal underworld. People never know what we went through to keep them safe and snug in their lives, Orpheus thought to himself. He rembered that whole last week of his life, in july of 2008. He remebers shooting two intruders in his house, and the sheer amount of firepower it took to take them down. One of them had Fangs at the time, it didnt register, the goth/ emo/ punk thing was big in hollywood, one of his chicks had those. But the shooting!, Orpheus carried a 50 calibur at the time, he dumped a whole clip into one, reloaded, shot the other, only for the first one to jump up. Struggling with this one orpheus shot him in the face, and managed to grab his old Chinatown Samauri sword of the wall, and lopped of his head. then the other one got up, and in a panic orpheus had to of sliced the little punk into like 20 peices. then he called his handler, and had to explain what happened. NSA agent s showed up quickly, and took the bodies and cleaned up the scene. He was debriefed for 5 hours, not understandinng why. He figured it was some kids hopped up on drugs, he'd seen that before. When they allowed him to go home, he was told to take a vacation, which he thought was strange, but he did, and left his hollywood digs to go spent a few weeks with his mom and pops in venice. On the thrid night in Venice, he was on the boardwalk, sitting on the rocks looking out over the pacific, 3 am. He had his gun resting next to him while chatting with a childhood friend, when everything went black. The only thing he could remeber was hearing a dozen loud shots, and his ," friend", talking to someone, telling them that's enough, he's not going to be a problem anymore, then black again. Coming to, he saw he was on a gurney, in asterilized hallway, with docters around him, and he was shackled to the gurney. His boss, stood over him yelling at the docters, as they injected him with a substance that set his whole body on fire. before he passed out he overheard his boss saying," take him to Caltech, hook him up now!!, we're gonna need him later!... then blackness............03/11/10 02:27
OrpheusDarkfoldMore to come soon03/11/10 02:27
MissyThis was great! I quite enjoyed the Orpheus introduction here. I do have a small piece of constructive advice to offer, however, even if it is unsolicited, hehe. It would make it much easier for your reader to read it (and for you to proofread it too) if you were to break the large chunk of text into smaller paragraphs. Particularly when there is dialogue... I generally find that starting a new line each time someone new adds a piece of dialogue serves as a visual cue for your audience to realize someone new is speaking :D

I'm looking forward to reading more!
03/11/10 04:33
OrpheusDarkfoldThanks for the advice, and i will, more is coming!03/11/10 05:15
OrpheusDarkfoldPersephone walamai hovered in the air in the middle of the old Hollywood and Highland courtyard, a pale orange glow about her. her eyes closed in concetration, she silently mouthed the words of Ancient magic, the likes of which had not been seen since her early days in the Egypt of legend. Orpheus wasnt sure what she was doing, but he watched her in awe. He had never felt such energy from a woman before, well not THAT kind of energy he thought to himself. But yet and still, he looked upon the woman who raised him from his sleep, and saved his life. At first he wasnt sure if he was grateful.   His last memories before blacking out had been hazy, chaotic, then nothing. Suddenly the slumber was interuppted by gunfire, and Orpheus awoke to se a woman standing over him. She walk tall and stately, long black hair flowing down her back. Her skin was a medium color, yet looked as if it was glowing a bit, but her eyes is what struck him the most; they were glowing brightly, covering him with a blue light, and it was at that time, that he realized he was naked, AND wet. He could feel the power coming from this woman, like the feeling of  air charged with electricity.  Slowly she knelt next to him, pushing her black cloak to one side. As this was happening , the sounds of combat around him ceased,  and he noticed a symbol attached to the woman's breast, suddenly began glowing blue. It was a cresent, within a geared circle. " Area is Secured, beginning extraction Elder" the voice came from the object on the woman, without looking at it or touching it she spoke back.
" good commander, land the transport on top of the bulding and meet me there" aftr saying that she grabbed Orpheus with one hand, and lifted him to his feet. She took her cloak off, and covered him with it, when her comm went off again."Transport has landed, a unit is waiting for you" "thank you commander" she said, while making sure oprheus was properly covered. Orpheus looked in from of him, and the woman helped him walk(he was too weak at this point to even talk, let alone stand) And he saw what appeared to be a large room, full of computers, lab tables, and other broken containment units, like the one he was sealed in. There was alot of commotion as well as techincians each wearing the emblem the woman wore, looked as if they were cataloging everything in sight, some drawing information from the databanks while others, sifted through paperwork, and examined the other units. As they approched the exit to the room, four soldiers appeared in the doorway. Each was dressed in a shiny black metallic body armor, their helmet miss mouths, with their eye openings glowing green. One of these Soldiers had red markings on his helmet, and this one approached the woman, with two large bags.
: " These are his belongings, we found them in the lower level storage areas, it looks like he was a soldier"  The  man said standing back while they passed by, the soldiers falling in behind them, some where waiting in the long hall way, and continued in front of them. The hallway was only half covered, most of the ceiling out here, long destroyed, look as if it led out to the roof of the building. Orpheus saw a larg black ship hovering on the roof, about the size of one of those old military vietnam helicopters. There was a larger craft, holding what looked like at least 40 of these soldiers sitting in the field in front of the building, surrounded by  three more of the smaller craft. As Orpheus looked around the courtyard, he vaguleyrecognized where he was. His shock was so strong he was able to utter one word loudly."Caltech!?" he said, as him and the woman were boarding the aircraft. This was the Caltech campus, he had been there many times, his handler had an office here. But the ruin was so completed he could not speak anymore, just look in amazement. He got settled in the seat next to the window, the woman standing in the isle, talking with the commander, as he was about to exit the ship. " we think there are more of the hostiles in the area, let them go or pursue?', the commander said.  " find them and kill them all before they leave the area, we cannot have this location compromised, the wards are not in place yet", she stated flatly, and with that the commander noded, and left the ship, and in moments they were airborn. Flanked by four other transports, the flew silently into the night, and for the first time Orpheus was able to see the City laid out underneah him, and what he saw would give him nightmares for the next few months. Los Angeles was in Half  ruined state,  The city was almost unrecognizable to him. The experience was numbing, and it filled Orpheus with such despair, rage, and sadness, he felt himself getting light-headed again. Head dropping in defeat, he slumped back in his seat, tears sliding unchecked down his face, not wanting to see anymore of the destruction.  The woman watched him the whole time, even when she was being briefed by a techie sitting next to her about the man in front of her. She reached out her hand, and grabbed his squeezing it tightly. Orpheus looked at her weakly, silent sobs wracking his body." All of this will be explained to you when we arrived at our destination", she said, not really knowing how to address his very real grief. "Trust me you will be given a chance to make this right, if it is possible, My name is Persephone, i'll see to it that you are taken care of" Orpheus squeezed her hand back, telling her he understood. As they flew over the city his thoughts went to his friends, his family, everything that was his world was below him in ruins, if there was anyway to salvage that, right now, he didnt see it, and he fell into another fitful sleep, filled with the nightmares of reality.........
03/13/10 03:30
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